Princess Prettie

Fantabulous. That's all I have to say. It's really heartfelt and I love your imagery... I literally can find NOTHING wrong with it. The "I'm Sorry" really stands out and ...

Here's Version 2.0... I don't know if this is more rushed or less rushed, and I tried my best to make it more visible, and I based a part of ...

I'm working on a revised draft: I took away the cussing, and I added a bit where more girls come and make fun of her, and I also added a ...

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You guys are nice. I'm glad there are other MSN-obsessers out there ;)

OOOH! Yeah I just read Go Ask Alice for school, and it kind of inspired me to write this, but they're going to be pretty different. Thanks for the advice! ...

Pretty good, but only a story skeleton. Also, very short, and a LOT of grammar/spelling errors. You've got a good idea and plot, you just need to use a better... ...

Cool. I'm working on my second version right now... This site is REALLY helpful!

Hey, thanks for the feedback. I am a new writer, and only fourteen, so I'm not the best at it... but the reason I used the cuss word is because... ...

Eesh not so popular piece of writing lol... but I'm kind of confused by your comments. What do you mean by narrative? And with the word 'bitches' do you mean ...

THANKS A TON! I think when I started this story I meant for Ashlie to be the blonde girl, but then changed my mind, but forgot to change the story. ...

Cheese (that sounds pretty random, but software, soft cheeses...)

1000 WORDS The photograph is labeled neatly Pinned to a corkboard Reminder of a girl Thirteen years old Clawing her way out Of the middle school box Finding a hole ...

Thanks for the feedback. And I'll totally be sure to read the rules. I know that this is really short, and it doesn't have a point, and the plot isn't ...

Not bad, not bad at all, but as the other commenters said, it is really short. There are a few capitalization errors, and I'm just going to remind you to ...